Well, I finally decided that I should try my hand at writing an actual song with vocals.

My good friend Jenni helped with a few of the lyrics, and once I was happy with the melody, Desi laid down the vocal track for me. Thanks team.

RealTracks used:
~902:Bass, Electric
1995:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm
~1228:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm
RealDrums: SmoothJazzCoolSw16

Developed in BiaB and RealBand 2016, and mixed / produced with Sonar Platinum and Izotope.

All comments welcomed of course. Thanks for listening.

Baby Don't Make Me Blue

Song:
Baby I gotta tell you
we gotta be more than friends
don't you think I care for you?
don't you see me make amends?

I wanna be the one to tell you
you're the only guy in my life
don't you care if you make me blue?
we gotta be more than friends

Here we are
you know we're just chasing them
chasing the moon and stars
I'm a holding on tight,
but you still want to fight and fight
baby it's so hard for me to know
if you don't love me, go
Why do you make me, please don't make me
and I'm still so strong for you baby
still hoping you'll be there to save me
Don't make me, don't make me,
Don't make me, please don't make me blue

I know I wanna give it my all
And I hope that you feel it too
I know that special look-in your eyes
But why do you make me blue?

Here we are
you know we're just chasing them,
chasing the moon and stars
I'm a holding on tight
but you still want to fight and fight
baby it's so hard for me to know
if you don't love me go
Why do you make me please don't make me
and I'm still so strong for you baby
Still hoping you'll be there to save me
So don't make me, don't make me
don't make me please don't make me blue

Absolutely a great and beautiful song ! And what a great voice of Desi ! Masterpiece !

Thanks Leo for your kind comments. They are appreciated!

Trev,

This is great!!!! Desi's voice and her performance are outstanding (and then some)!! I love the laid back, cool-jazz-with-a-twist-of-funk feel.... really classy music and a credit to everyone involved! Your mix is superb. Everything sparkles

A creation to be proud of indeed.

All the best,
Noel

Noel
Thanks for stopping by. I genuinely appreciate your comments. They do mean a lot. Thanks!
Trev

Hi Trevor.

Well, that was just amazing!

Such a sophisticated chord sequence and a classic arrangement with a George Benson feel to it.

Beautifully performed, produced and mixed with an unbelievably good vocal from Desi. She's obviously been doing this for a while!

To say it's "Radio Ready" would be an understatement.

You've got to do some more of this stuff.

ROG.

ROG, thanks a million. I'm encouraged by your feedback for sure.

Beautiful backtrack and vocal

Hi Trevor,

what a beautiful song. Everything fits: lyrics, chord progression, arrangement and mix. Desi is a great singer!
Hats off!
Give us more of this.

Guenter

Trev....

What a nice "first write" on lyrics.... You certainly nailed it first time out...


My only crit is that this superb vocal is way to far down in the mix. Your vocalist is a great singer and her vocal needs to sit CLEARLY on top of the mix, not down in it. My guess is a few dB up (3 to 6 dB should do it) would do the trick. It's almost where it needs to be but not quite fully there. Listen to Celine or Cher or Marriah .... set your vocal level accordingly.

Excellent work.

Trev this is absolutely gorgeous! Well done!

DANG! I'm not sure what I was expecting, but this song blew my expectations right out of the water... and I wasn't even swimming!!

I'm guessing Desi had her vocal chords surgically replaced with rubber bands, right? Her vocals stretch so well from note to note! Just beautiful... the perfect vocal accompaniment for your rich jazz composition!

I've always had a hard time trying to build convincing transitions in the jazz realm, but I thought your chords flowed VERY well in this piece... and the lyrics are a perfect fit for the mood and cadence of the song... very well done all around! It's surprising to me just how adding vocals to a good song can make it a great song, and the sum of your contributions on this project work together to create a very compelling composition... as Josie said, it's absolutely gorgeous!

Pro sounding from start to finish! Great job!

Hi Trev !
An incredible emotive voice with an efficient smooth jazz music ! It is great......I appreciate very much. Thanks for posting this song. Christian

Guenter, thanks for your positive comments, they are appreciated.

Herb, thanks for taking the time to listen. I genuinely appreciate the feedback, and will have a much better listen to the levels. I thought that they were a fair bit on top from the middle to end of the song, maybe a bit light at the start. I did deliberately keep the vocal "Mmmmm" and "Yeahhh" low during the intro, but perhaps this needs lifting too.

Thanks again.

Josie, thanks for your positive comments. They're received with gratitude!

Pat, I'm really blown away by the fantastic feedback. I have to admit I am extremely pleased with the vocal, and there's no doubt that this is the one single item that gives massive strength to the song. Thanks for your comments, greatly appreciated.
Trevor

Hi Christian,
Let me say that I'm buzzed out by the positive feedback, yours included. Very much appreciated.
Trev

Scott
Thanks for the comments!
I'm pleased to receive them
Trev

Hello, Trevor

Very gorgeous and beautiful song with emotive vocal.
It is such as a song written by B. Bacharach and sung by Whitney Houston.
It was so nice to use Acoustic Piano instead of Rhodes Piano.
I also like your chord progression, which is a little bit different from mine.
For example, maybe I will put chords on the first 4 bars as follows. (But it is merely a matter of taste.)
Ebmaj9 / / / - Fm9 on Bb / / / - Cm(add9) / / / - Dm7 / G7(b5) G7

Anyway, this is great.
I look forward to your next song very much.

Best Regards.

Shigeki Adachi