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A House That Catches Your Light A few years ago my family had the experience of designing and building our own house. We had a contractor but did a ton of work ourselves - it was about the most exhausting and exhilarating year of this old timer`s life.This song is an attempt to capture some of those feelings. Key=Db , Tempo 100, Length (m:s)=3:36 8 bar intro, 78 bar chorus, from bar 9 to bar 86. Repeat x1 chorus No Melody No Soloist track. Song is saved with Volume, Pan, Reverb, Chorus, Bank0, Style is _STOMPIN.STY (Stompin' Train Indie Folk) RealTracks in style: ~2474:Bass, Acoustic, Held Ev 085 RealTracks in style: 1295:Banjo, Rhythm, ModernCountrySync Ev16 100 RealTracks in style: ~598:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Bluegrass Doc Ev 100 RealTracks in style: ~409:Fiddle, Background George Ev 085 RealTracks in style: 624:Fiddle, Soloist George Loop in Song: House-Techno-Trance\House - crunchy_120_b drums ev16.wav RealDrums in style: Country Even16 Real Drums ShakerFolk Even16 Real Tracks RT1752 Accordion Rhythmn Pop ******************* A House That Catches Your Light come with me where waves of mountains fall into fields of green with a bundle of straw and a handful of earth we`ll raise a roof over our dreams I`ll plane down my edges you`ll remind me where the end is bind me with love when my back breaks and though the roof may leak and the hinges creak the rainbow will not be disgraced will not be disgraced we`ll build a dream house a bird house a blood sweat and tears house where swallows rest from their flight we`ll cook and carouse there when nothings stirring but the mouse dear we`ll make love `til the roosters start to fight in a house that catches your light a house that catches your light come with me where waves of mountains fall into fields of green with a bundle of straw and a handful of earth we`ll raise a roof over our dreams sometimes I`ll get discouraged try to quit in a flourish step outside watch the thunder roll but like the genie in his tomb I`ve already seen these rooms you will deck with the colours of your soul the colours of your soul we`ll build a dream house a bird house a blood sweat and tears house where swallows rest from their flight we`ll cook and carouse there when nothings stirring but the mouse dear we`ll make love `til the roosters start to fight in a house that catches your light a house that catches your light © Robert Cordrey Nov.2016
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"with a bundle of straw and a handful of earth we`ll raise a roof over our dreams"
"we`ll make love `til the roosters start to fight in a house that catches your light"
A few of the good lines - amongst many... this might be my favorite write of yours, Robert. It is "poetic", yet "accessible"...
Some of the lines seem to have a few more beats (syllables) than fit comfortably into the musical line - which in this case is, actually, very effective - sort of like "folk rap" - take that further and you might invent a new genre... (the instrumentation speaks to that, as well...)
I like this.
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Robert, you have captured what everyone yearns for here! Love the line about placing a roof over our dreams. Good job! Thanks, Torrey
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Love it Robert. Great song, and a really, really, really good title!!
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"with a bundle of straw and a handful of earth we`ll raise a roof over our dreams"
"we`ll make love `til the roosters start to fight in a house that catches your light"
A few of the good lines - amongst many... this might be my favorite write of yours, Robert. It is "poetic", yet "accessible"...
Some of the lines seem to have a few more beats (syllables) than fit comfortably into the musical line - which in this case is, actually, very effective - sort of like "folk rap" - take that further and you might invent a new genre... (the instrumentation speaks to that, as well...)
Floyd did it again! I had copied the first verse to paste. GREAT opening verse! And a really, really nice song all around. You may have channeled a little bit of Leonard's spirit on this one. Great job!! Take care. Greg
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"with a bundle of straw and a handful of earth we`ll raise a roof over our dreams"
"we`ll make love `til the roosters start to fight in a house that catches your light"
A few of the good lines - amongst many... this might be my favorite write of yours, Robert. It is "poetic", yet "accessible"...
Some of the lines seem to have a few more beats (syllables) than fit comfortably into the musical line - which in this case is, actually, very effective - sort of like "folk rap" - take that further and you might invent a new genre... (the instrumentation speaks to that, as well...)
I like this.
floyd That`s very kind, Floyd... and acutely observed on those extra syllables as well. The verses with internal rhymes came last and when I tried singing them it was a bit of a mouthful & I almost decided to give the song a reggae style...maybe if there`s a 2nd version in future. Robert
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Robert, you have captured what everyone yearns for here! Love the line about placing a roof over our dreams. Good job! Thanks, Torrey Torrey, Thank you for that- glad you liked it. It sure is a cool feeling to see something you`ve held for years as an idea grow walls and a roof... have to pinch yourself when you`re finally walking around inside. Robert
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Love it Robert. Great song, and a really, really, really good title!!
David, Thank you, you`ve made my day. When I wrote the title line I knew it summed up what I wanted to say ... and wondered if listeners would "get it". Robert
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Floyd did it again! I had copied the first verse to paste. GREAT opening verse! And a really, really nice song all around. You may have channeled a little bit of Leonard's spirit on this one. Great job!! Take care. Greg
Greg, Your keen observations are always much appreciated - if they chime with Floyd`s, all the better! Many thanks, Robert
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Hi Robert, Wow! You've pulled out all the stops on this one. It's a terrific listen. The opening refrain for each verse really captured my imagination! come with me where waves of mountains fall into fields of green with a bundle of straw and a handful of earth we`ll raise a roof over our dreams
What stunning imagery you've created with a mere 29 words. When I say these words aloud, they seem to roll like quicksilver... it's a really captivating effect. Wonderful writing! Regards, Noel
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Robert, I too endorse the comments made above by others.
This is really beautiful writing, and the arrangement is quite masterful.
An excellent delivery, no question.
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Hello, Robert
Beautiful song with good melody and nice vocal. The start of the A melody is especially pleasant. Your songs are definitely in direct descent from Pete Seeger and Woody Guthrie. Enjoyed my listen a lot.
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Hi Robert
The song title is the ‘kernel of this song’ the ability to write all around it’‘ is fabulous. Its flexibility it’s the “hook, and I suspect you knew that from the get go. I just sat and said to myself ,wish I had thought of that. Over the years having built three myself, at sea, mountain, and finally small holding, always the main criteria was view with light, but for you to so lovingly sought for the light to illuminate your wife and your obvious pride and love in her, was very clever song crafting. Musically, vocally, all round, you have a very marketable product here I was similarly moved by song ‘House of Stone and Light ‘ by Martin Page a song who’s lyrical expression and song crafting I rate up there among the best in the world. You can be very proud of this one
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Robert, what a great title for a song. In conjures up all sorts of ideas about what the song will be about before even listening. Great write. Raise a roof over our dreams indeed!
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Robert,
Some really exceptional lyrics here... Great delivery as well. Really enjoyed it.
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Hi Robert, Love it! I can feel the joy! You have captured your experience well with the feel and lyrics. What a great line, "with a bundle of straw and a handful of earth we`ll raise a roof over our dreams." Thanks for sharing. btw Is it a cob house? Pauline PG Music Team
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Hi Robert,
Such a nice subject to write a song about. Beautiful house it seems, is it the one in the picture! Very nice song and chord progression.
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Hi Robert
The song title is the ‘kernel of this song’ the ability to write all around it’‘ is fabulous. Its flexibility it’s the “hook, and I suspect you knew that from the get go. I just sat and said to myself ,wish I had thought of that. Over the years having built three myself, at sea, mountain, and finally small holding, always the main criteria was view with light, but for you to so lovingly sought for the light to illuminate your wife and your obvious pride and love in her, was very clever song crafting. Musically, vocally, all round, you have a very marketable product here I was similarly moved by song ‘House of Stone and Light ‘ by Martin Page a song who’s lyrical expression and song crafting I rate up there among the best in the world. You can be very proud of this one
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Paddy, Thank you very much! Your thoughts (and experiences, it seems - four houses built! Oh my, I might be able to go through all that once more but I think that`ll be enough) are very much in line with my own here. My wife had to be the project manager as were building where I could barely speak the language - looking back at her endurance and good humour throughout I`m still amazed. I write in a very simple bubble map way, in this case at the centre was " building a bird house", but when the title line came along it moved to the centre and it was a very quick write. I`d forgotten about that very good Martin Page song - thanks for sending me to listen again. Robert
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Robert, I too endorse the comments made above by others.
This is really beautiful writing, and the arrangement is quite masterful.
An excellent delivery, no question. Thank you for listening and commenting. I`m really pleased the arrangement works - its a cool style on its own but I did work on many changes within the framework. Robert
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