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#419956 - 06/30/17 12:52 PM
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I knew Ginny when I was 23 (-ish). (I had a bit of a crush on her) She was about 10 years older (which is a lot when you are 23). There was always a bit of "sadness" to her... DINNER FOR ONE thirty-five is a cruel age for an unmarried woman when the years just refuse to slow down she's grown tired of the quiet but she's used to the freedom and there's no suitable partners around so night after night she falls asleep on the couch with the tv on it gets too hard to make a king-sized bed alone and why bother with dinner for one the friday night drinkers are overweight and balding and leave their wives at the p.t.a. the boys on saturday are barely out of high school and seldom have anything to say so night after night she falls asleep on the couch with the tv on it gets too hard to make a king-sized bed alone and why bother with dinner for one a fifteen year old dog a seven year old cat in opposite corners asleep she's got work in the morning she should turn the tv off but it keeps her from thinking too deeply so night after night she falls asleep on the couch with the tv on it gets too hard to make a king-sized bed alone and why bother with dinner for one The BAND: RealTracks in style: 366:Bass, Electric, Country Ev 065 RealTracks in song: ~2200:Guitar, Nylon, Background CountryBrent Ev 085 RealTracks in song: 1595:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Pop8thsSteady Ev 065 RealTracks in style: ~368:Guitar, Acoustic, Strumming Ev 065 RealTracks in song: ~1676:Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking CountryBrent Ev 065 RealTracks in song: 1728:Piano, Acoustic, Rhythm PopBalladJohn Ev 085 RealTracks in song: 2335:String Quartet, Rhythm PopHall Ev 085 Comments welcomed. Hope you like it. floyd
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#419958 - 06/30/17 02:26 PM
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Re: Dinner For One
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FJ - you the man!
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#419959 - 06/30/17 02:30 PM
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Re: Dinner For One
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If marriage is something you are striving for in your life, I think 35 would be a hard age for anyone—male or female.
The song definitely reflects that sense of loneliness and desire for a companion effortlessly. Great job.
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#419964 - 06/30/17 03:28 PM
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Re: Dinner For One
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Hi Floyd.
You really are a masterful storyteller.
I once knew someone who fits that description, with an outward show of confidence and an underlying sadness. Maybe lots of us have met her at sometime.
Before I listened to the track I was intrigued by the end of the waveform on Soundcloud and wondered what you'd been doing there. The ending was worth waiting for.
Another classic in the Floyd style, with professionalism written all the way through.
Cheers, ROG.
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#419969 - 06/30/17 03:44 PM
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Floyd,
So much beauty and tenderness... Outstanding lyric, vocal and production. Loved it.
Bob
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#419970 - 06/30/17 03:45 PM
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Floyd,
Very effective storytelling wrapped up in a simple but just right backing.
Liked the strings at the end and harmony vocals.
Very nice work all round.
Peter
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#419989 - 06/30/17 09:48 PM
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Another gem from the master "FJ", great lyrics and composition.
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#420000 - 07/01/17 12:28 AM
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Re: Dinner For One
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Floyd,
Di and I were contemplating the lyric to this one for a few minutes. We kind of came to an agreement - you are a contemporary Tom T Hall. Writing a simple song that resonates is one of the most difficult tasks a songwriter can attack.
A great song is a great novel in a hundred words or less. As you anxiously anticipate the next page in a thrilling novel, you savor the expectation of the next line of the song. You've written a masterpiece, Floyd. But, this is just one of many.
I can speak from both sides of that fence. As I think you know, I also write novels (3 on Amazon now and three in the works). Every time I sit down to start a new novel, I write a song about it first. Nothing formal or worth posting - just a reference for myself. It's better than an outline and challenges me to to turn 85 words into 85,000 words and say, more or less, the same thing.
The strings at the end of your song were an unexpected but pleasant surprise. And I think I you've captured the dilemma of an unmarried woman of that age. This was a real pleasure to listen to. Thank you.
Alan & Di
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#420009 - 07/01/17 05:19 AM
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Beautiful heartfelt story in your lyric Floyd. Super vocal and backtrack.
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#420032 - 07/01/17 07:54 AM
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pure quality in every way ,great story and production.always love the sound and the depth of the vocals .thank you FJ
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#420034 - 07/01/17 07:55 AM
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Re: Dinner For One
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Hi Floyd.
You really are a masterful storyteller.
I once knew someone who fits that description, with an outward show of confidence and an underlying sadness. Maybe lots of us have met her at sometime.
Before I listened to the track I was intrigued by the end of the waveform on Soundcloud and wondered what you'd been doing there. The ending was worth waiting for.
Another classic in the Floyd style, with professionalism written all the way through.
Cheers, ROG. Well this kind of wraps it up ;-) We might add that you are one of the most talented and productive songwriters here on the forum and this song clearly demonstrates that again. This must be your 120/130+ song? Cool! Rob & Anne-Marie
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#420065 - 07/01/17 12:48 PM
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Dan! - thanks for stopping by... If marriage is something you are striving for in your life, I think 35 would be a hard age for anyone—male or female.
The song definitely reflects that sense of loneliness and desire for a companion effortlessly. Great job. Ember - Thanks. I know this is sort of a "dated" perspective - it reflects "the way things were" 40 years ago... it was a different time and things have changed greatly since then... (in good ways and bad)
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#420069 - 07/01/17 01:14 PM
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I love the ending!
didn't wanna forget to mention that
Such a good write, I know that you've mentioned before that
you usually write words first and then add music, sounds like
that's maybe the case here. Your music choices and melodies
never disappoint. I think that's the weakness of most lyrics first
writers, not enough attention put into the rest. I've said this before
but you lay out the blueprint for all of us, the deep background, attention
to little details, I care about your characters.
At first I thought it was too abrupt jumping to the Friday and Saturday night
guys mentioned and thought maybe that you had trimmed some lines out.
I listened again and it works well as her assessment of "what's out there".
We're lucky to have you here, you're like our own "Deacon" and we're
just Reyna waiting for more inspiration.
I use the tv to keep from thinking bout too much a lot.
loved it,
Kenny
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#420117 - 07/02/17 04:15 AM
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Hi Floyd.
You really are a masterful storyteller.
I once knew someone who fits that description, with an outward show of confidence and an underlying sadness. Maybe lots of us have met her at sometime.
Before I listened to the track I was intrigued by the end of the waveform on Soundcloud and wondered what you'd been doing there. The ending was worth waiting for.
Another classic in the Floyd style, with professionalism written all the way through.
Cheers, ROG. ROG - thanks for that... As a songwriter, I was a "story teller" before anything else (later moving to a more "commercial" angle), so it is nice to have that made note of. Glad you found the ending appealing...
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#420158 - 07/02/17 09:21 AM
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Floyd, Another great version of the subtly gut-wrenching, quietly understated reminder that so many human beings as Thoreau said "lead lives of quiet desperation." I agree with the Tom T. Hall comparison, very apt. I was reminded of that too. I liked your choice of RTs for this. Well done. Excellent story telling as usual as everyone has said. Hope you have a party blast for July 4th and write a song about drinking, cussin', hollerin' and screamin' and howling at the moon for pure drunken joy and kissing every pretty girl in town next. Throw a Telecaster in there too and turn it up to 12. 
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#420164 - 07/02/17 10:27 AM
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Floyd,
Your long history of home runs makes it difficult to think up new comments! I hope what follows doesn't sound like I'm trying too hard! ;-)
As always, I like the way you take everyday elements (ie. dinner and making the bed... topics with which any audience can identify...) and spin them into pathos, making them uniquely applicable to the person in your story. The net result of this approach is that the audience gets a glimpse into a daily routine they've never lived themselves. That's interesting.
And when it comes to pathos, nothing says it quite like strings. I thought your decision to add an extended passage of "strings only" was the perfect segue between the story and the listener's reaction to it. I imagine it to be the functional equivalent of the way one's thoughts wind down as they lay on the couch, drifting off to whatever is on TV, after eating a frozen entree... alone.
On a completely different note:
I thought Ember's opening comment was interesting: "IF marriage is something you are striving for..."
More and more, I think marriage is not as compelling to either gender as it once was (but for differing reasons.)
I'll go so far as to say that in some circles this song would generate kickback because it relies on certain stereotypes that are no longer universally accepted (and in some cases, strongly resisted.)
It's becoming harder to write stories and songs that resonate with a wide audience. Society is not only divided politically, but also in terms of social norms... and that really intersects with the spectrum of topics that are typically addressed by music as a form of social commentary.
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#420230 - 07/03/17 03:12 AM
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#420248 - 07/03/17 06:20 AM
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Great vocal, one of your best I think, and great harmonies too.
Love that little lick that plays under the "suitable partners around" line, fits perfectly.
Love the story, great lyrics as usual, and man, that ending! Not expected but very cool indeed.
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#420327 - 07/03/17 04:07 PM
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Hey Floyd, This is very nice. Really like the instrumentation. That nylon guitar sounds great! Good write. Your a machine!  Greg
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#420347 - 07/03/17 10:14 PM
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Hello, floyd
Very beautiful song with sadness.
I do not quite well understand nuances because the lyrics are English, but this is beautiful.
And your vocal is really fitted to this tune.
The band with a small organization is very preferable and strings at ending are very cool.
Very enjoyable listen.
Best regards.
Shigeki Adachi
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