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#476093 - 06/04/18 07:50 AM
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The Weeds Of Love
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Registered: 11/29/06
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Loc: Finland
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Here is a pop-rock tune called The Weeds Of Love. The message is that sooner or later comes a time to remove the alien species with all memories from the garden of life and start again in a clean landscape. I'm singing here although my vocal track sounds quite harsh. I know there are many many things I should fix... But I hope you like the song itself  I originally wrote the lyrics in Finnish and later made the English translation. Here you can find the Finnish version. RealDrums: BluesRockSlowEv RealTracks: Electric bass #387 Acoustic guitar #2780 Electric guitar #1257, #636, #799, #2687 Vocals by me Mixed in Adobe Audition 2018. Lyrics: I suffocate the lilies that remind of the godly beauty that once made me blind I burn the daisy petals of this plot where you counted earnestly loves me or loves me not I turn the stones and stumps on which you hid I saw off those thujas at their feet sweet love we did. I tear the roots of memories from you I dig out every seed from the view that species, harmful & alien gone is the burning on my skin finally rid of the weeds of love. I cut the thorns of roses since they nip stains of fuchsias bleeding on my fingertip in this private wood you have no right to bud I weed my heart won't let your poison in my blood crop, water, light or warmth you can't displace backfire is the last flame on your fading face. I tear the roots.. I know you're now only mold to me wilderness like a barren lea by the cut down field I leave the past walking alone towards the new at last. I tear the roots.. ------------ Janne
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#476103 - 06/04/18 08:55 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Registered: 04/09/14
Posts: 432
Loc: Montréal Quebec Canada
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Hi jannesan
This song feels 70's and has a nice instrumental. The vocals are well sung. The lyrics throws me off a bit... and leaves me standing on the fence about the purpose which you wish to convey. Politics about aliens is an interesting choice to pursue, not sure if you made your case clearly. Thanks for sharing.
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#476198 - 06/04/18 07:12 PM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Registered: 09/27/10
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Well, the lyrics lost me, but I enjoyed the melody, singing and production. 
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#476250 - 06/05/18 05:55 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Registered: 12/29/10
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Loc: Charlotte, NC
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Janne.. your musical ideas are very inventive!! I love the unusual turn unexpected changes in the music. It really kept my interest, I was always listen closely to hear where you’re going next with the music. I listened to both the English and the Finnish versions. You are a very courageous musician to have rendered your lyrics into English! I really appreciate your efforts to do that, given that translation be so difficult. In the end, I like your Finnish version much better because I could hear the rhymes and also how your musical thinking flows out of your native tongue. Really enjoyed listening to this, and I think I learned a bit from your efforts!
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#476262 - 06/05/18 07:05 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Registered: 12/23/17
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Loc: Alabama
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THe tune is excellent, groove feels right, Sounds good!!
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#476306 - 06/05/18 12:21 PM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: LPman]
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Registered: 11/29/06
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Loc: Finland
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Hi jannesan
This song feels 70's and has a nice instrumental. The vocals are well sung. The lyrics throws me off a bit... and leaves me standing on the fence about the purpose which you wish to convey. Politics about aliens is an interesting choice to pursue, not sure if you made your case clearly. Thanks for sharing. Thanks LPman for your nice comment The lyrics were inspired by a plant called giant hogweed, which is not native European plant, thus foreign or alien species. Very difficult to get rid of and it is phototoxic. In the lyrics I'm using similar weed as a metaphor to a bad relationship, to get totally out of it you have to destroy all memories of it, good and bad. Janne
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#476307 - 06/05/18 12:24 PM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: dcuny]
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Well, the lyrics lost me, but I enjoyed the melody, singing and production. Thanks David for your kind words Well I thought my lyrics were quite clear having analogy between getting rid of a difficult weed and forgetting a bad relationship, obviously I was wrong  Janne
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#476309 - 06/05/18 12:27 PM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Registered: 01/18/16
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Thanks for sharing this with us jannesan! Quite enjoyed the progression and overall vibe to this. Good guitar tones too. Well done!
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Cheers,
Joe
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#476353 - 06/05/18 04:53 PM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Registered: 08/09/10
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Loc: New York
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Janne,
This is a very cool write... I really like the delivery and production.
Very nice!
Bob
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#476448 - 06/06/18 08:35 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Very cool song. Excellent lyric and vocal well done
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#476464 - 06/06/18 09:43 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Janne,
Your analogy was clear to me... but then I`m a career gardener ( Thuja is pronounced ThuYa btw) and have played around with writing a song about plants.
I agree with Tano, you are a creative song writer and I always find something surprising and new in your music.
I don`t find the vocal harsh - will have a listen to your Finnish version to compare.
Robert
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#476496 - 06/06/18 02:23 PM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Registered: 06/19/17
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Loc: Victoria, BC
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I couldn't make out the lyrics in some parts, but I think that it is a really pretty song and that the vocal style does suit the song. Great job so far.
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Ember
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#476591 - 06/07/18 07:30 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Wow - this was incredible Some very fascinating lyrics on this, and I love the subtly catchy chorus here. I'm getting a 70's rock sort of vibe with this one. Really well done - thanks for sharing!
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Deryk
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#476620 - 06/07/18 09:03 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: Tano Music]
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Registered: 11/29/06
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Loc: Finland
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Janne.. your musical ideas are very inventive!! I love the unusual turn unexpected changes in the music. It really kept my interest, I was always listen closely to hear where you’re going next with the music. I listened to both the English and the Finnish versions. You are a very courageous musician to have rendered your lyrics into English! I really appreciate your efforts to do that, given that translation be so difficult. In the end, I like your Finnish version much better because I could hear the rhymes and also how your musical thinking flows out of your native tongue. Really enjoyed listening to this, and I think I learned a bit from your efforts! I really appreciate your very positive feedback and kind words I'm glad you find my songs inventive and you have time and interest to dig deeper into them Janne
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#476621 - 06/07/18 09:05 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: cliftond]
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THe tune is excellent, groove feels right, Sounds good!! Thanks cliftond for your very kind words Janne
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#476622 - 06/07/18 09:06 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: Joe -PG Music]
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Thanks for sharing this with us jannesan! Quite enjoyed the progression and overall vibe to this. Good guitar tones too. Well done! Thanks Joe for enjoying my simple tune I agree, BIAB has really good guitars Janne
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#476623 - 06/07/18 09:07 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: rsdean]
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This is a very cool write... I really like the delivery and production.
Very nice!
Bob Thanks Bob for your kind feedback Janne
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#476624 - 06/07/18 09:08 AM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: Scott C]
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Very cool song. Excellent lyric and vocal well done Thanks Scott for your kind words about my lyrics and vocals Janne
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#476757 - 06/07/18 11:30 PM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
[Re: jannesan]
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Hello, Janne
Very nice pop-rock tune!
The melody and the chord progression are excellent as usual.
I prefer Finnish version.
Finnish fits this melody really well.
English is easier to convey the meaning of lyrics to everyone, but I think that mother tongue is also wonderful.
Enjoyed my listen a lot.
Best regards.
Shigeki Adachi
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#477011 - 06/09/18 03:30 PM
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Re: The Weeds Of Love
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Janne, I wasn't able to quite pick up on some of the underlying meaning of the lyrics but I love the melody and chord structure in this! You always have neat little twists and turns in the structure of your songs! I really like what you did with the chorus in this! Great production and mix! Thanks, Torrey
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