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#509023 - 12/12/18 04:37 PM
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Ghosts That Never Lived
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Ghosts That Never LivedThis is my latest composition about a person struggling with the choices she made. I used the Style FPBTSSW (Two Swing Fingerpicked Guitars Slow) and added some other instrumentation. Real Tracks: BB RealGuitar 1678 Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Country BB RealStrings 527 Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking Hank BB RealBass 535 Bass, Electric, Pop BB RealDrums-NashvilleSwing8^2-SideStck,Ride RT2505 Piano, Electric, HeldChords RC1705 Guitar, Electric, Soloist CountryBrent RT2337 Violin, Background, PopHigh Ev 085 She pulls the curtain To hide from the night Doesn’t want the morning to come They always told her that she had the right She knows her heart will never forgive She cries for ghosts that never lived That never lived She’s waiting for him To walk through the door Loud lamentations to come Her bed is empty, so she sleeps on the floor She know her heart will never forgive She cries for ghosts that never lived That never lived She claims he loved her He swears it’s in her head She’s breathing in all the words That he could have said She hangs her head down Her heart is crystalline No summertime playgrounds to come Somebody told her everything would work out fine She know her heart will never forgive She cries for ghosts that never lived That never lived
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#509075 - 12/12/18 10:45 PM
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Re: Ghosts That Never Lived
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Well done - you've got some evocative language there! Nicely sung and produced. It's a sparse arrangement, but very effective, like when the fiddle comes in for the last verse. One nit - it seems like there's an effect on your voice - doubling, chorus, or perhaps an ambient reverb - that doesn't really seem to fit. I think the vocal would sound a lot better without it. Anyway, I enjoyed the listen. 
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#509104 - 12/13/18 03:41 AM
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Re: Ghosts That Never Lived
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Well done - you've got some evocative language there! Nicely sung and produced. It's a sparse arrangement, but very effective, like when the fiddle comes in for the last verse. One nit - it seems like there's an effect on your voice - doubling, chorus, or perhaps an ambient reverb - that doesn't really seem to fit. I think the vocal would sound a lot better without it. Anyway, I enjoyed the listen. Thanks for the listen and your response. I agree with you about the vocal. I am not quite satisfied with it. Thanks for pointing out the possible causes.
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#509121 - 12/13/18 04:53 AM
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Very nice! A good write - fresh, original, well-penned.
Nice arrangement and an excellent mix. Super vocal (I did not mind the effect at all). Really nice harmonies, too.
The only "distraction" I found was the second half of the guitar solo. The first half was nice - fit the song...but in the second half it got a bit "busy" and it was as though the guitar guy was "showing off" - which seemed inappropriate for such a gentle, thoughtful song.
I really liked this.
fj
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#509243 - 12/13/18 01:37 PM
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Re: Ghosts That Never Lived
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"She knows her heart will never forgive
She cries for ghosts that never lived
That never lived"
Great lines!!
The vocal, write and arrangement are all in the pocket. It sounds very nice on our monitors.
Enjoyed it!
J&B
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#509266 - 12/13/18 02:47 PM
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I can picture this lady as it's happening. Great song
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#509287 - 12/13/18 03:53 PM
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A good story in the write -the chorus lyric is especially memorable as J&B mentioned.
I like your vocals -they are always resonant and well mixed ( no problem on the harmonies- for me they aren`t obtrusive).
The arrangement is straightforward - it works well for the song.
Enjoyed!
Robert
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#509382 - 12/14/18 02:19 AM
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It's almost the complete package - except for the reverb as mentioned.
the easiest way I've found to get things "in the same room" is to use the same reverb on all instruments with it - varying the degree a little only. The reverb within BIAB is hard to match so I've found exporting dry is the safest option.
Sweet sad song.
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#509410 - 12/14/18 04:33 AM
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Hi Ezekiel,
a very beautiful and touching song - bothe lyrics and melody.I liked the solo a lot the way it is. Great job.
Cheers, Stefan
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#509418 - 12/14/18 05:34 AM
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Nice work on this one I really enjoyed your lyrics on this, and the sparse instrumentation helped them hit all the harder. Some solid vocals on this too. It is definitely attention grabbing, and I loved the haunting and sad atmosphere it sets. Really well done - thanks for sharing!
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#509498 - 12/14/18 10:42 AM
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Re: Ghosts That Never Lived
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You've created a nicely written piece expressing personal regret...
I really like the melody you've chosen to enhance the lyrical content...
Simplicity in arrangement... Good job & very effective.
I must say I enjoyed the performance!
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#509508 - 12/14/18 11:05 AM
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Ezekiel's Storm, very nice song and a great job on the vocals and bgvocals!! You always put up good stuff!! Thanks, T
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#509534 - 12/14/18 12:55 PM
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Great song. Love the lyrics and vocal.
Excellent!
Bob
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#509543 - 12/14/18 01:39 PM
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Well done - you've got some evocative language there! Nicely sung and produced. It's a sparse arrangement, but very effective, like when the fiddle comes in for the last verse. One nit - it seems like there's an effect on your voice - doubling, chorus, or perhaps an ambient reverb - that doesn't really seem to fit. I think the vocal would sound a lot better without it. Anyway, I enjoyed the listen. I agree with David on both counts....very nice song with some cool ideas!! The effect on this style of song seems too much. Nice work!! Take care. Greg
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#509559 - 12/14/18 03:13 PM
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Pretty song nice arrangement.
Nice work.
Peter
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#509594 - 12/14/18 04:55 PM
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Very easy and enjoyable listen.
Great vocals. I liked the way vocals and bass had found their very own, distant frequency space on this tune and yet sounded nicely as a whole.
Thank you for sharing,
Misha.
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#509650 - 12/14/18 11:39 PM
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Dear "Ezekial's Storm"...
There is something almost mysterious about your lyrics for "Ghosts That Never Lived". As I interpreted them, the woman who is the subject of your song seems to live with a dream that could be mistaken for a memory, or vice-versa. There's something subtly unreal about it, which makes the poetry in your lines stand out as luminously as a newly-discovered land:
"Her heart is crystalline
No summertime playgrounds to come..."
Beautiful and evocative writing. Your Real Tracks as heard through your composition have a gentle, sundown feel to them that, though somewhat sad-sounding, nonetheless are soothing to listen to. I liked the vocal harmony, too.
Sweet, soulful songwriting this is, "Ezekial's Storm"!
Truly,
LOREN
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#509680 - 12/15/18 03:51 AM
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Super vocal. Really like the effects used with your vocal. Very nice backtrack fits the vocal perfectly. L:oved the tele twang on the guitar solo..
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#509728 - 12/15/18 07:08 AM
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Ghosts that never lived. This can be taken so many ways. My thoughts went to the children that never make it the full 9 months to be born for one reason or another . It is so common and it really haunts you for your life when you lose a child in this manner.
Good song.
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#509839 - 12/15/18 02:41 PM
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Nice arrangement and an excellent mix with a nice mellow vocal that enhances the song.
Thanks
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