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#551524 - 08/27/19 10:30 AM [User Showcase] I Can't Quit You
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Habits.


I CAN'T QUIT YOU

been 3 months since i bought smokes
chalk it up to a habit that i broke
i'm still trying to avoid
that pack a day that i enjoyed
and the curse it'll always be

i quit going down to jake's
just imagine the courage and willpower that that takes
i just stopped drinking
i'd got to thinking
it was gonna kill me...but..
   
   i can't quit you
   my drug of choice
   you give my angels wings
   and my devils voice
   good or bad
   the best or worst i ever had
   it don't matter
   'cause no matter what i do
   i can't quit you

you're forever in my veins
an ever repeating refrain
when i hear you call my name
i'm a moth, you're the flame
i don't care if i get burned
   
   i can't quit you...



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RealTracks in song: 1412:Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm CelticHornpipe Sw16 070
RealTracks in song: 2678:Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm BluesSw16GrooveBrent Sw16 085
RealTracks in song: 2686:Guitar, Electric, Soloist BluesSlow12-8BrentSimple Sw 065
RealDrums in style: NashvilleSwing16^1-a:Snare, Hihat , b:Snare, Ride

Harmonies: the janettes (a bit of me, a whole bunch of Janice Merritt)

J&B - HUGE THANKS. As always...



Hope you enjoy it.
Comments welcome.
Have at it.

fj

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#551526 - 08/27/19 10:38 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Hi Floyd,

Hey, when did I ever get in first!

The beat threw me in the first bar - just not what I was expecting from reading the lyrics,
but it sure works for me. Is that the Hip-Hop drum track?

Anyway, a terrific groove going on and super vocals from you and Janice.

Clever lyrics, as always. How do you do that?

Loved the lead guitar, but wanted more of it. Have I said that before?

Still as professional as ever.

ROG.

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#551528 - 08/27/19 10:46 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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that's a good one. I like the groove.

nice job on the lyrics.
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#551536 - 08/27/19 11:40 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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I won't get into the specifics of the lyrics but there are some killer rhymes and rhyme structures going on in this song.

I really wanted to hit into your pacing/cadence. You may have had this "feel" before; but I don't remember it exactly like this. There is a very modern flow to it. Specifically the verses. I like it a lot! It all comes down to the styles you picked, your choice of rhyme placement, how many syllables you are choosing to use, and even the range of notes you are using.

THEN you it us with a VERY contrasted chorus! Brilliant! Yes, I know people talk about raising the note range to give it a lift, and use a different rhythm than you used in the verse...but you did it a very modern way, yet traditional way. It spans and ties in the old great writing and yet has that current edge to it. The jump and rhythms in the chorus again where great, and bold choices. That's writing with confidence and knowledge! Ya just can't beat that!

All coming in at 3:25 indicating your tempos and song structure are right on as well.

IF I'm nit-picking I didn't care for the end. Meaning, I did not like that it did that. Ended. That was a wrong choice in my book. wink





Edited by HearToLearn (08/28/19 07:35 PM)
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#551538 - 08/27/19 11:49 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Floyd,

This is an excellent country-pop song. I love the flow and swing of the music - you excel at this - it's a true talent.

Awesome vocal and some more great backing by Janice. Of course, the mix is stellar... smile

Loved it!

Bob

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#551563 - 08/27/19 02:30 PM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Only an ex-smoker could write lyrics such as this.
As always Floyd you give us your finest.
Thanks for sharing. Rob4580

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#551585 - 08/27/19 05:26 PM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Quitting bad habits of any kind can be hard. Thanks for sharing this with us!
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#551595 - 08/27/19 06:20 PM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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As HearToLearn, clever rhymes and killer rhyme schemes.

Love the funky beat - the band's in excellent form. Nice licks you've chosen.

Great setup in the first two verses. So much narrative packed into so few words! Interestingly, verse three feels like a bridge.

Production is impeccable as always - clean and clear. Your singing is easygoing and expressive - that country wail on the high notes works so well, and Janice is on the lower harmony like a soft velvet pillow.

Can you tell I enjoyed it? wink
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#551606 - 08/27/19 08:15 PM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Like the best of bought ones!
The structure, rhyming scheme & metre are excellent yet despite the "structure" it flows like conversation - very cool.
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#551615 - 08/27/19 11:25 PM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Another winner, Floyd (and Janis).
(I kicked the smokes thirty years ago, by the way. A struggle at the time, but so glad I did.)
Regards,
Leon

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#551616 - 08/28/19 12:05 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Three months since you bought smokes...but only 3 minutes since you bummed another one off a me. smile And we all know you invented "Jake's" just for the rhyme...but that's ok if you quit drinking.

Man, this just pops along. Great chair-dancing tune. I love the theme and the delivery, vocals and harmonies. Another great one.
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#551623 - 08/28/19 02:31 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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When I first saw the title I thought you were going to do a Led Zeppelin cover eek

Love the way you write, I'm hopeless at it myself but can recognize the ability in others.

Favorite line among many:

"you give my angels wings and my devils voice"

Vocals of course are right in the pocket, and always enjoy hearing the janettes make an appearance.

Nice groove, drums sound great, and mix is top notch.

Sounds modern and old school at the same time, well done!

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#551642 - 08/28/19 07:46 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Really nicely done - I'm a big fan of the lyrics and your vocals on this one. It's really gentle and catchy. And even though I've never smoked cigarettes, the subject matter relates to us all in one way or another. I thought the mix on this was top notch as well.

Thanks for sharing smile
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#551658 - 08/28/19 09:04 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: Guitarhacker]
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Originally Posted By: ROG
Hi Floyd,

Hey, when did I ever get in first!

The beat threw me in the first bar - just not what I was expecting from reading the lyrics,
but it sure works for me. Is that the Hip-Hop drum track?

Anyway, a terrific groove going on and super vocals from you and Janice.

Clever lyrics, as always. How do you do that?

Loved the lead guitar, but wanted more of it. Have I said that before?

Still as professional as ever.

ROG.


ROG - Always glad to see you drop in... first!!

There are no drums involved until :35 - and then it's just the NashvilleSwing16... everything up to that point are the 2 acoustic and the bass providing that rhythm... Lead guitar? - gotta leave 'em wanting more, ya know, not wishing/wondering when you'll quit... smile

Thanks for the great review...



Originally Posted By: Guitarhacker
that's a good one. I like the groove.

nice job on the lyrics.



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#551674 - 08/28/19 12:17 PM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Floyd,
Your lyrics here are so well crafted- just clever enough to grab interest without taking away the feeling that the experience is true.
A fine,relaxed sounding acoustic backing and that electric break fits beautifully.
The best part for me:your warm vocals - absolutely clear with great phrasing.

Robert

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#551690 - 08/28/19 03:20 PM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: ROG]
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Originally Posted By: ROG
Hi Floyd,

Hey, when did I ever get in first!

The beat threw me in the first bar - just not what I was expecting from reading the lyrics,
but it sure works for me. Is that the Hip-Hop drum track?

Anyway, a terrific groove going on and super vocals from you and Janice.

Clever lyrics, as always. How do you do that?

Loved the lead guitar, but wanted more of it. Have I said that before?

Still as professional as ever.

ROG.
Originally Posted By: ROG
Hi Floyd,

Hey, when did I ever get in first!

The beat threw me in the first bar - just not what I was expecting from reading the lyrics,
but it sure works for me. Is that the Hip-Hop drum track?

Anyway, a terrific groove going on and super vocals from you and Janice.

Clever lyrics, as always. How do you do that?

Loved the lead guitar, but wanted more of it. Have I said that before?

Still as professional as ever.

ROG.


Rog, thanks for mentioning the harmony. I’m always excited to get the Janettes call!

Janice
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#551716 - 08/28/19 05:30 PM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Another pearl,FJ! Great lyrics, singing, and music. This song has so many hooks that you've exceeded the creel limit.

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#551740 - 08/29/19 01:08 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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floyd

Some clever intelligent lyrics, set to a beautifully mixed band.

Your vocals and of course the Janettes sound great.

An excellent piece of songwriting wonderfully presented.

Peter

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#551763 - 08/29/19 03:52 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Hi Floyd ...

I don't get here very often these days ... same reason as always. But, man, I'm so happy I got her to hear this one. There are so many things to like simply as a listener, yet so many intricate nuances from a musician's POV. So often, you have to sacrifice one, to a certain degree, to accomplish the other. There are no sacrifices on this one .. it's spot on from both POVs.

The B/G tracks are so fresh, yet the lyric and vocal delivery classic. The mix on your songs is almost never less than stellar. This song is a terrific example of why I say that. I particularly enjoyed the drum track. I think that's what defines the modern aspect. The first two verses are a great preamble to the killer chorus.

Those Janettes were in rare form! What a delight!

Wishing all involved the very best. Ya'll created one helluva song here and delivered with the same expertise and craftiness. You make it sound so easy! Excellent ...

Alan
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#551886 - 08/30/19 06:17 AM [User Showcase] Re: I Can't Quit You [Re: floyd jane]
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Very cool lyric Floyd. Super vocal. What a neat backtrack. Loved the beat. Guitar was excellent. Well done

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