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#610442 - 08/12/20 04:30 PM [User Showcase] She Doesn't Want Me to Dance
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Ezekiel's Storm Offline
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She Doesn't Want Me to Dance

I had this song about 80% finished, was working on the chorus, and needed a hook. I'm a big joker at home and often partake in mock Jerry Lewis rhythmic ambulations about the house. After engaging in these shenanigans, I'll say to my wife, "Let's go out dancing tonight." She always deadpans, "No." Thie last time she said that, I realized I had my hook.

Tracks:
RT2929 Guitar, Acoustic, Rhythm PopFunkyJoe
RT2933 Guitar, Acoustic, Fingerpicking SongwriterFolkSlap
RT697 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm ElecRockDirty
RT650 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm PopRockBritHeavy
RT1722 Guitar, Electric, Soloist TexasBluesRockStraight
RT1008 Bass, Electric, ElecRock Ev

The drum track is spliced together from various loops.


Lyrics

She’s the rain on the meadow
She’s the light behind each shadow

When the night comes crawling
And she keeps me awake
Into my heart she’s falling
She says we’ll take a morning break

She’s something else
She puts me in a trance
She says she loves me
But she doesn’t want me to dance

She’s the moon in my passion
She’s the fabric of all fashion

When the night comes crawling
And she keeps me awake
Into my heart she’s falling
She says we’ll take a morning break

She’s something else
She puts me in a trance
She says she loves me
She doesn’t want me to dance

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#610455 - 08/12/20 05:29 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Hi Scott
I'll leave the analysis to the experts, but I really like this one.
After my first listen I immediately cued it up again.
Regards,
Leon

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#610500 - 08/13/20 02:50 AM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Good song! Love your vocal.

"She says she loves me
But she doesn’t want me to dance"

Nice hook!

Track sounds good also, enjoyed the listen.

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#610514 - 08/13/20 04:55 AM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Crawlin’...fallin’...loves how you “wobbled” those in the melody.
Really interesting selection of guitar RTs..gave it great texture.
Liked the stops you used.
Vocals++
Your wife has got to share the royalties on this one!

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#610568 - 08/13/20 11:21 AM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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The spoken tag was worth the price of admission smile

We could envision the Lewis ambulations.

The band is a cool RT genre mashup and well backed your rousing well delivered vocal.
(Janice provided "rousing!")

Nice use of the drum loops also.

Fun!

J&B

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#610605 - 08/13/20 04:13 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Janice & Bud]
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Originally Posted By: Leon1
Hi Scott
I'll leave the analysis to the experts, but I really like this one.
After my first listen I immediately cued it up again.
Regards,
Leon


Thanks, Leon. I'm not good at analysis either, just listening.
Originally Posted By: BlueAttitude
Good song! Love your vocal.

"She says she loves me
But she doesn’t want me to dance"

Nice hook!

Track sounds good also, enjoyed the listen.


I appreciate the comments, Dave.

Originally Posted By: Tano Music
Crawlin’...fallin’...loves how you “wobbled” those in the melody.
Really interesting selection of guitar RTs..gave it great texture.
Liked the stops you used.
Vocals++
Your wife has got to share the royalties on this one!


Royalties, huh? I can only wish for those.

Originally Posted By: Janice & Bud
The spoken tag was worth the price of admission smile

We could envision the Lewis ambulations.

The band is a cool RT genre mashup and well backed your rousing well delivered vocal.
(Janice provided "rousing!")

Nice use of the drum loops also.

Fun!

J&B


Thanks, J&B. I had a lot of fun making this one and ad libbing at the end.

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#610607 - 08/13/20 04:22 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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This is really good. I liked how the guitar leads augments your excellent vocal, nice work there. I loved your lyrics. Super use of RTs. Super stops also. Love those drums.

Excellent work.
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#610632 - 08/13/20 07:44 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Ezekiel's Storm,
I hope your wife still likes you... On a bright side, this secret solo dance is great!

Clever lyrics! Very well put together. A lot of spontaneous details, but makes a whole. Vocals are A+. Thank you for sharing!

Misha.

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#610634 - 08/13/20 07:59 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Hi Scott,

This is a cool arrangement. I really liked you vocals. They hearkened back to the 80's, kind of a Simple Minds sort of vibe. As a matter of fact, if you posted on here, "Hey, listen to this old Simple Minds song." I would have believed you!

Thanks for posting it, I enjoyed listening to it.

Also, at least you're able to dance like Jerry Lewis, who had SOME rhythm, I'm not even at that level... Ha!

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#610643 - 08/14/20 02:43 AM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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It's a cool, amusing well constructed song. the vocal and melody are ace but the way the vocals is split L & R with no presence in the centre of the image weirded me out a bit.
In my head phones the vocal is mainly in the left channel with some image in the other...sounds a bit like the imbalance that many, many ADT plug ins cause.
Nevertheles --- cool
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#610654 - 08/14/20 05:45 AM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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You know, I thought I was listening to the Doors. You have an uncanny resemblance to Van Morrison. I love it!!

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#610683 - 08/14/20 10:48 AM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Scott C Offline
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Very cool backtrack. Super vocal. Love the tone in your voice. Well done. Guitar was excellent as well

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#610699 - 08/14/20 01:52 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Very Haight-Ashbury to me, liked how the lead guitar didn't step on the vocal. And your singing was terrific as usual. Great trip back in time for me.
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#610722 - 08/14/20 04:26 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Really nice production and a great vocal. Nice use of guitar solo realtracks.

Very impressive.

Peter

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#610746 - 08/14/20 07:41 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Cool song. The vocals are very rich. They remind me of mix between Neil Diamond and David Bowie. Great use of the band.
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#610842 - 08/15/20 04:26 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: rayc]
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Originally Posted By: MarioD
This is really good. I liked how the guitar leads augments your excellent vocal, nice work there. I loved your lyrics. Super use of RTs. Super stops also. Love those drums.

Excellent work.


Thanks, Mario. I've been meaning to tell you that I love your tag/signature line on your posts.
Originally Posted By: Rustyspoon#
Ezekiel's Storm,
I hope your wife still likes you... On a bright side, this secret solo dance is great!

Clever lyrics! Very well put together. A lot of spontaneous details, but makes a whole. Vocals are A+. Thank you for sharing!

Misha.



My wife had a good laugh when I played her this song. Thanks, Misha.

Originally Posted By: Bawb
Hi Scott,

This is a cool arrangement. I really liked you vocals. They hearkened back to the 80's, kind of a Simple Minds sort of vibe. As a matter of fact, if you posted on here, "Hey, listen to this old Simple Minds song." I would have believed you!

Thanks for posting it, I enjoyed listening to it.

Also, at least you're able to dance like Jerry Lewis, who had SOME rhythm, I'm not even at that level... Ha!


Keep dancing, Bawb! If Elaine Bennis can do it, so can you!

Originally Posted By: rayc
It's a cool, amusing well constructed song. the vocal and melody are ace but the way the vocals is split L & R with no presence in the centre of the image weirded me out a bit.
In my head phones the vocal is mainly in the left channel with some image in the other...sounds a bit like the imbalance that many, many ADT plug ins cause.
Nevertheles --- cool


Thanks, Ray. I used Waves Reel ADT, but used the stereo plug-in instead of the mono.

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#610843 - 08/15/20 04:28 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: jptjptjpt]
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Originally Posted By: Scott C
Very cool backtrack. Super vocal. Love the tone in your voice. Well done. Guitar was excellent as well


Scott, thanks for the compliment!

Originally Posted By: TuneMonger
Very Haight-Ashbury to me, liked how the lead guitar didn't step on the vocal. And your singing was terrific as usual. Great trip back in time for me.


Tunemonger, thanks so much for the comment and the listen.

Originally Posted By: PeterF
Really nice production and a great vocal. Nice use of guitar solo realtracks.

Very impressive.

Peter


Thanks, Peter!!!

Originally Posted By: jptjptjpt
Cool song. The vocals are very rich. They remind me of mix between Neil Diamond and David Bowie. Great use of the band.


JPT, I appreciate the comments.

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#610850 - 08/15/20 05:00 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Now that is a very cool song and a fun listen... You have a great voice - mix and tracks were perfect.

Excellent and much enjoyed!

Bob
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#610913 - 08/16/20 08:25 AM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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I always like hearing about the story behind the song.

I'm not crazy about some of the earlier guitar fills, but that section starting around 3:14 is sweet!

I get a David Bowie vibe from this. Good mix and vocals. Enjoyed it.


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#610954 - 08/16/20 02:08 PM [User Showcase] Re: She Doesn't Want Me to Dance [Re: Ezekiel's Storm]
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Fun song!! Love the enthusiasm and energy! Really well arranged and produced......the lead guitar fits nicely with the tension in the lyric! Well done!!! Take care. Greg

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