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The Country That Doesn't Want You The title for this song was inspired from a part in the novel American Dirt by Jeanine Cummins. For the "C" part of the song, I borrowed directly from "The New Colossus" by Emma Lazarus: the poem inscribed on the plaque on the pedestal of the Statue of Liberty. I know I have to work on my diction: In the chorus, "want you" comes out "wanchoo." Gesundheit! Merry Christmas, my forum friends! The Wrecking Crew: RT697 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm ElecRockDirty RT4133 Guitar, Electric, Rhythm ProgRockLondonSyncPower NI Electric Mint Various Guitar Loops NI Prime Bass DOD Drum Loops Lyrics You left your family You left your home Danger in the desert Traveling all alone Looking for liberty And a dream to come true You want to go To the country that doesn’t want you Poverty, brutality Famine, and disorder They had the same reasons But came from a different border Looking for liberty And a dream to come true You want to go To the country that doesn’t want you Give me your tired Give me your homeless and poor Where’s the lamp by the golden door Looking for liberty And a dream to come true You want to go To the country that doesn’t want you. Your huddled masses Yearning to breathe free The wretched refuse Of your teeming shores Words aren’t true anymore
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Super groove
I found nothing wrong with your vocal
Great mix
But it isn't that the country doesn't want you. The country wants you to enter it legally.
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Excellent narrative,
Excellent analysis too.
My country has reneged on its Refugee Rights agreements time & again over the last decade.
We don't have a plaque proclaiming an undeniable truth whilst doing the opposite we just do the wrong thing.
Australia, like the U.S.A., appears as a beacon of promise to those fleeing poverty, war and corruption.
Pity we aren't the light on the hill any more.
Musically this is strong from the backing to the melody...love the rattly bass in the C.
Your voice is good for this though you've probably pushed to hard to sound earnest in the 1st verse.
I suspect a warmer, move understanding voice at that point would be perfect.
This is the time of year when the narratives combine well... it's unlikely that the coincidence will spark in many.
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Great groove, would've liked to have heard the chorus "pop" more if there were some way to do that. Good singing, I've always enjoyed your voice. Good lyrics. Happy holidaze!
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I agree with Ray:
Excellent narrative,
Excellent analysis too
Really well written, and I like the use of the quote from the plaque on the Statue of Liberty. Lou Reed did something similar in a song at some point if memory serves.
Really well done, Scott, great groove and vocal.
Best to you and yours for the holiday!
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Great song with a great groove, it's different in a very positive way, I like it a lot. This was a running gag when Roger Hodgson was interviewed by my local radio station: - Hello, my name is Roger Hodgson...- Gesundheit!
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love the voc style similar to the one on your what i consider to be a fantastic uber hit song...To be with you.
merry xmas.
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Hi Scott
Cool song
Has a great background track
And the vocals work great with the sound of the song
I really like it
Thanks for sharing
Have a nice Christmas and a healthy new year too
Many greetings
Andi ;-)
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Super groove
I found nothing wrong with your vocal
Great mix
But it isn't that the country doesn't want you. The country wants you to enter it legally. Thanks, Mario! Excellent narrative,
Excellent analysis too.
My country has reneged on its Refugee Rights agreements time & again over the last decade.
We don't have a plaque proclaiming an undeniable truth whilst doing the opposite we just do the wrong thing.
Australia, like the U.S.A., appears as a beacon of promise to those fleeing poverty, war and corruption.
Pity we aren't the light on the hill any more.
Musically this is strong from the backing to the melody...love the rattly bass in the C.
Your voice is good for this though you've probably pushed to hard to sound earnest in the 1st verse.
I suspect a warmer, move understanding voice at that point would be perfect.
This is the time of year when the narratives combine well... it's unlikely that the coincidence will spark in many.
Thanks so much, Ray, for the feedback. I a bit lazy and a bit impatient when recording. I do five vocal takes (unless it's unbearably bad). Then I take the least of the worst takes for each line, so for the first verse I just took the better sounding take. I might revisit the vocal when I am less lazy and more patient. Great groove, would've liked to have heard the chorus "pop" more if there were some way to do that. Good singing, I've always enjoyed your voice. Good lyrics. Happy holidaze! Thanks for the listen and the positive comments about the vocal.
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Hi Ezekiel,
Good song with catchy beat and good lyrics.
Unbelievably - I'm also currently working on a song about the Statue of Liberty.
Best Regards
& Merry Xmas
Nigel
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Love the feel, and that guitar you pushed to the right really supports it well. Good mix. Your diction is fine. Seems most folks I know say wanchoo. It's all about communication, and you tell this story with compassion and sing it with passion. Many words turn into platitudes that no longer have meaning, but there is truth in what you say. Happy Christmas, Scott.
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Scott, This is a rockin' tune. Rockin' for sure. Man, I think you should take this song down to a border town in Texas to a little bar with a lot of Dodge Rams and Harleys out front. Get up on stage and start singing this as loud as you can and add: MAGA hat wearing rednecks! Gonna drive your truck in a big ditch stinkin' dirty redneck hater Stevie Ray Vaughn was sissy! Make sure you are behind a wall of titanium chicken wire and let me know how it goes. Don't forget to say Merry Christmas!!! 
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Ez,
Killer tracks! Radio Pop Punk. Excellent production/arrangement.
Excellent write. Intelligent.
Your vocal is perfect for this.
Very Well Mixed.
Top shelf.
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Zeke, great song with an equally important theme. This topical subject is becoming more of a worldwide crisis with no easy answers, so it is important to keep pushing it forward so that maybe someday the humanitarians and the protectionists can compromise and find something that works for everyone. It won’t be easy. I wrote something about this from a different angle sometime ago and may revisit it. This was a great listen. Good work, Tom
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Yes it is a great arrangement and mix.
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I agree with Ray:
Excellent narrative,
Excellent analysis too
Really well written, and I like the use of the quote from the plaque on the Statue of Liberty. Lou Reed did something similar in a song at some point if memory serves.
Really well done, Scott, great groove and vocal.
Best to you and yours for the holiday!
Thanks, Dave. Happy Holidays to you! (Think of the closing melody line of the song when you read that.) Great song with a great groove, it's different in a very positive way, I like it a lot. This was a running gag when Roger Hodgson was interviewed by my local radio station: - Hello, my name is Roger Hodgson...- Gesundheit!Thanks for the listen and comment, BD. love the voc style similar to the one on your what i consider to be a fantastic uber hit song...To be with you.
merry xmas.
om Merry Christmas, OM! Hi Scott
Cool song
Has a great background track
And the vocals work great with the sound of the song
I really like it
Thanks for sharing
Have a nice Christmas and a healthy new year too
Many greetings
Andi ;-) Thanks, Andi. Frohe Weihnachten.
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Hi Ezekiel,
Good song with catchy beat and good lyrics.
Unbelievably - I'm also currently working on a song about the Statue of Liberty.
Best Regards
& Merry Xmas
Nigel Nigel, I'm looking forward to hearing your S of L song. Love the feel, and that guitar you pushed to the right really supports it well. Good mix. Your diction is fine. Seems most folks I know say wanchoo. It's all about communication, and you tell this story with compassion and sing it with passion. Many words turn into platitudes that no longer have meaning, but there is truth in what you say. Happy Christmas, Scott. Thanks much, Marty!
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Nicely done! As for "wanchoo", a song in this style would probably be more harmed than helped by applying "proper" diction.  The lyric reminds me of when the acting head of US Citizenship and Immigration Services suggested rewriting "The New Colossus". 
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Strong message of the contradiction between liberty and reality, interesting inspiration, the backstory explains the lamp and the last line clearly.
What a sound, the drums have nice 'pop' sound and those riffing guitars work very well. The "C" parts are harder, but really cool, reminding me of 80's Brit new wave, New Model Army.
Enjoyed your vocals, fits the message and the band.
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Ez,
Killer tracks! Radio Pop Punk. Excellent production/arrangement.
Excellent write. Intelligent.
Your vocal is perfect for this.
Very Well Mixed.
Top shelf.
fj Thank you for the kind assessment, Floyd. Zeke, great song with an equally important theme. This topical subject is becoming more of a worldwide crisis with no easy answers, so it is important to keep pushing it forward so that maybe someday the humanitarians and the protectionists can compromise and find something that works for everyone. It won’t be easy. I wrote something about this from a different angle sometime ago and may revisit it. This was a great listen. Good work, Tom Thanks, Tom! Yes it is a great arrangement and mix.
Vic Thank for the feedback, Vic.
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