Good "talking" blues. I think if you just re-recorded the vocals a few times you would get better and better ways to phrase this. The "stops" did sound sound sort of hollow and empty, but that's just the way real tracks work. Maybe adding some reverb/delay to the "rests" might make things ring out a little more naturally.

Enjoyable tune.

Kevin


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