"Tweaks? Only my personal ones, (i) I'd put the female vox a lot further back in the mix, so it's etheral, kind of 'mysterious and almost heard'. (ii) I'd add a tiny tad of reverb to the main vocal to make it sound like it's in the same space as the the backing, (iii) try a quiet, smooth stereo pad starting at the middle eight at 1:54 to give the new section a lift."

These are good points. The female vocal needs more "air" and needs to be toned down. And the bridge needs to be filled in. I have a guitar part waiting to be executed to help this out. Pad's not a bad idea.

The track does die at 3:59. I was too lazy to fade the demo!!!! Thanks to everyone for their comments on this.

Moo