Nice job for a first song. The vocal has extreme amount of reverb to my ear. The guitar picking was nice. Remember in any song, with the exception of an instrumental piece the vocal is the main subject. Every word should be clear and precise. You are telling your story to the audience. I know that mixing the vocal in is hard because I am still learning everytime I do a new song, it seems each one presents its own set of rules. It seems for every step forward you take 2 back. But keep on singing and writing. You do have talent. Thanks for sharing! God bless!

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