Hey, all:

Well, here’s something new . . . Carroll Kiphen wrote these lyrics about two years ago. I saw them on another website—really liked them—and did a quick acoustic work tape . . . sans a bridge, which I couldn’t come up with at the time. And then . . . it sat . . . and sat . . . and I’m not sure why.

The work tape popped up on my phone couple of weeks ago and I decided to take another dive into it. For better or worse, this is what I’ve come up with. I’m not sure the production is where it needs to be . . . but I’ve taken it as far as I can go for now. I’m hoping some fresh and friendly ears will help steer me in the right direction.

Hope you enjoy the listen . . . thanks in advance for the feedback. Stay well, all!

Deej

Here’s the song:

SOS

Here are the lyrics:

Solitude is a ghost town
Of haunted nights and dreams
Of endless persecution
From my conscience judging me
Ranting like a madman
Unbridled in his rage
I’m a captive audience
Locked in my own cage

Throw me a rope I think I’m drowning
Can you hear my SOS
Can you give me absolution
If I kneel down and confess
Throw me a rope I’m drowning
Can you hear my SOS

Solitude is a ghost town
Of all that could have been
Of letters filled with love
That I wrote but never sent
Brooding like a poet
Struggling with his soul
I lie here in my coffin
While the dirt fills up the hole

I grip the bars and shake them
They rattle but barely budge
Is it my eternal damnation
To be the sinner and the judge

And here’s the band:

RealTracks 909: Bass, Electric, SmoothPoppy Ev16 090
RealTracks 801: Guitar, Electric, Rhythm SouthernSnappyGritty
RealTracks 3267: Cello, Background CelticAirFlowingNatalie
RealTracks 3299: Guitar, Electric, Rhythm HardRockThrash12-key
RealTracks 3302: Guitar, Electric, Rhythm HardRockThrashHollow12-key
RealTracks 4137: Guitar, Electric, Soloist ProgRockTO Ev 130
RealDrums: AltRockSlowSteady8ths^4

Last edited by Deej56; 06/01/23 06:25 PM.