So DJ,

I'm interested in how this relationship with Carroll Kiphen worked.

Did you connect with him on LinkedIn or Facebook and discuss using one of his lyrics and did you guys become official collaborators on this song by that conversation?

I just took a look and saw that he has stuff on LinkedIn and elsewhere that he's looking for collaborators and I was just wondering how he works with people and what the process is.

Like, did you guys sign off on anything?

The only thing I might add if you are attempting another version of it later is to try and do a live performance standing in front of a microphone with a Telecaster hanging around your neck.

This is the type of song where there has to be a very intimate, struggling, even painful connection between the artist, the instrument, the lyrics and the microphone in order for it to come off sounding "real."

When the chorus kicks in you have to be gunslinging that Tele like your life depended on it.

In this manner of production it sounds a little too much like the singer is forcing some type of emotion against a backing track, whereas for this type of genre and lyric there needs to be an amped up fusion between the "alive"/living/crafted performance and the lyrics to become ultimately convincing, I think.

Just a thought. I am only one listener. The mix sounds fine for a certain genre but I think a few live tracks could wrestle more from it and make it sound less "backing track-y".

Nice job.




David Snyder
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