Originally Posted by NigelSpiers
Hi,

This is a very promising song. Loved the piano intro and rich backing. Also the vocals are excellent.

Lyrics - a suggestion:
You seem to have one too many words in many of the lines which stops the flow and rhythm of the vocals.
- just a suggestion on a very good song.

Well done.

Best Regards
Nigel

Thanks very much, Nigel. There are indeed some metre "cowlicks" in there. I'm glad the backing managed to poke through, initially I'd almost "released" it as just an instrumental.