Originally Posted by floyd jane
I Love it.

R.W. is Bernie to your Elton. This has That kind of dynamic.
The lyric is interesting and uniquely original - much like Bernie's lyrics were.

"I still have that picture
Her back to the camera
The smokes in her pocket
Standing like a Samurai"

Exquisite.

Like Elton's melody/music this constantly surprises. And adds to the lyric by doing so.

An Outstanding Production.
I listened several times to catch more and more.
Nice changing landscape of guitars.
Well placed drum flourishes.
Those pushes work! I don't think I've ever tried a push on a hold.
(I've always played a track with the push I hear and then move the BIAB push to match that. Mostly, I stopped doing pushes)

LOVE the added guitar in the chorus. A Man Who Understands A Hook.

The vocals and harmonies are a delight.

This is very well done.
Thanks for continuing to write and produce music. I fear the days are numbered. severely.

Damn. Good. Music.

fj

Geez, Floyd, this is the nicest post ever. Thank you!

We're both big fans of Bernie and Elton, so if a little influence shows, it is the sincerest form of flattery for sure.

I'm with you on pushes. This tune was just an experiment to start with what BiaB can do well and work backwards.

The guitar fills were the very last adds. Those spaces were screaming for...something, and the fills fit the requirement. I'm no shredder but I like a hook-ish lick.

Thanks for the kind words on the vocals. Definitely my weakest area, but I'm learning to compensate. smile Harmonies and bridges are my favorite songwriting puzzles to work.

Yes, I'm afraid that songwriting and production may soon be lost arts, sort of like calligraphy: Once MS Word and laser printers got so good, who can bother? Hope we're both wrong. At any rate, I'm pretty sure I'm going to keep doing this for the duration. I like to amuse myself.

Appreciate the listens and encouragement!

Last edited by DC Ron; 02/19/25 01:15 PM.

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