Hello, forum friends

This song is written for the recording session of our music circle this summer.
I would like to introduce you two versions, which are the live band version and the RealTrack version.
The RealTrack version was made for the lyricist to learn the melody of this song.
I usually prepare a instrumental demo version of the song made in advance with BIAB for lyricists.
Any comments encouraged.
Always welcome.

Best regards.

Shigeki Adachi

Title: 若さのままに (Translation: Stay Young -Young Days Waltz-)

Link of Live Band Version by Yamaha Teachers:
https://soundcloud.com/animarorecords/young-days-waltz

Vocal: 玉田 剛士 (Tsuyoshi Tamada), my music circle friend
Accompanied by Yamaha Teachers
Following additional VST instruments played with EastWest Symphonic Orchestra
Ist Violins, 2nd Violins, Violas, Cellos & Trumpet
Scored by me.

Link of RealTracks Version:
https://soundcloud.com/animarorecords/young-days-waltz-instrumental

Style is _JWALZEP.STY Jazz Waltz w/Electric Piano
RealTracks in style: ~929:Bass, Acoustic, Jazz Waltz Sw 110
RealTracks in style: 2191:Piano, Electric, Rhythm JazzWaltz Sw 110
RealTracks in song: ~933:Guitar, Electric, Rhythm JazzWaltzFreeComp Sw 110
RealTracks in song: ~1092:Guitar, Electric, Soloist JazzWaltz Sw 110
RealDrums in Style: JazzWaltzTerryClarke^3-a:Brushes , b:Brushes Busy

Summary of lyrics

Many roses line up at a flower shop in front of the station
A sweet fragrance
The surface of my mind shimmers in early summer
The shop girl turns around

Swaying her ponytail
She is gleefully humming "Waltz for Debby"

Youth is a sin
I'm lost for words, mesmerized by her

She chose a jade brooch
As her birthday gift
Her sign of the zodiac is Gemini and mine is Cancer
She is refreshing our school days

Time passes before I know it
And even if I can never return here again
I'll never forget these days

She has fresh voice,
Earnest eyes, and sweet fragrance
Youth is a sin
I'm madly mesmerized by her